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Come back

I missed you that day
When fate played its hand
Dealt you a doozy
But you fell for a bluff

I shout your name
NO ANSWER
Footsteps erased in the sand
Your lost! Mired in drudgery

Fake smiles, empty conversation
False trophies, lonely contemplation
Childish blinded creation
Marching your pointless meditation

You say that your happy
At the bottom of the well
Tunnel vision
Treading water

I don’t believe you
I only see the beauty
Of your soul.
©2009 ~pageburner
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Thoughts of a friend.

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:iconteague-drydan:
nice poem. a few typoes with "your" tho. 2nd stanza, line 4; 4th stanza, line 1--i believe those "your"s should be "you're" or "you are"

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Ok thanks i will fix them.Didn't really spend time checking them. ooops
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:iconrestingplace:
like this poem. can feel your emotion.
:icondenlm:
I was comment on the "your" versus "you're" issue too, but now I can simply say, "well done". Your friend sounds like he or she is flying blind right now, and heading for trouble.
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Big trouble but she is happy to stay with a man who emotionally and mentally abuses her.I'm not quite sure what to do about it.
:icondenlm:
Not much you CAN do, but be supportive if she wants it. It is up to her to see him for what he is. So few women do. But I will hold out hope for her, since she has you as a friend.

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